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[Comic for Friday, September 16, 2005]

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[[Ki finishes reading Dex's story, "Prometheus One".]]
Dex: Well? What did you think? Is it okay?
Ki: I think it's pretty good, Dex.

Ki: The plot works, although you could have foreshadowed the twist better. Maybe add a little to the pre-Dexlar bit to build tension. The descriptions are pretty vivid.

Ki: You can tell that the characters are well developed in your head. It will be interesting to see what you can do with them when you write more about them.

Dex: So... you think I should write more?
Ki: Part of me wonders if encouraging you is a good thing, but yes.

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